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December 10, 2012
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This is a gift for ~xPariS as a huge thanks for the awesome cake badge you gave me c: It tastet YUMMY~

And this was so fun to draw, anyway, sorry for the long wait time. The pose was so hard to draw the time I started making it (A long time ago). I HOPE YOU GUYS LIKE MY NEW STYLE IN SHADING, ALSO!! c: Please tell me what you think 'bout it!

Neona is a wonderful dinosaur chara, but it's drew like a wolfie hereeeeee.

Neona is © ~xPariS
Art is © me *13MARISA
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The anatomy is the biggest issue that I can see here. The paws are too bulky, and the claws should be a bit thicker. The pads on the toes are in a proper position, but the rest of the pad should be moved further down along the paw, it looks like its on the leg. With the right foreleg, even though the left leg has a an obvious joint on the right is too straight, and its impossible to see the other joint. Its not natural for a wolf that's rearing up like that, to have its leg out perfectly straight after the first bend. The left leg where it bends then goes out to the paw is bent is too, well, crooked. It looks more like the leg was broken, rather than bent.

I understand what you were trying to do with the muzzle and face, however you went about it the wrong way and the nose stands out too much. The wrinkle is too severe on the top, and there's none at all with the rest of the muzzle. When a wolf growls or snarls, the entire muzzle wrinkles, not just the top. The left eye is in the wrong position, it should be partially obscured by the muzzle if this is in 3/4th's view. The eye shine was overdone, and improperly done. When coloring eyes its important to reference actual eye shine, rather than go with what you think is pretty. A wolf's eyes are in a different shape than that, and their irises never show unless they're submitting, are afraid, or both. The fur coming along the back of the head needs to start behind the ear, not at the cheek fur. Considering how much fluff most wolves have, this makes the neck seem very thin, and thus lack the muscle to support its head. The ears are rather ragged looking, whether this is intentional or not, wolf ears aren't shaped this way. They're round, smooth and don't end in points. Depending on the situation, if this is dominant aggression you're trying to show, the ears need to be perked and forward. If this is a fear aggression, then the ears need to be flat back, and if its fear aggression showing the whites of the eyes is okay and recommended.

The mouth is somewhat okay, do try to realize that wolves have more teeth than that in their mouths, and that when a wolf is snarling, that most of its teeth are showing as its a threat display. Most wolves have dark gums, with more pink towards the part where the teeth connect with the gums. The teeth don't really look like they're attached to the gums, they look more like some kid stuck faint blue triangles on a piece of putty.

Now for the shading. Its way overdone, little bits of fur here and there aren't going to cast a shadow that spectacular, where's your light source? It looks like its everywhere at once. Once again its important to reference actual fur, rather than go with what you think is pretty. I can see you used black to shade, rather than go with a more color friendly choice. In the future, please do go with a darker shade of the color you're using, rather than just using black. This is a novice mistake several artists make and have made.

All in all, I think you need to look at more references of wolves when you draw, actual pictures of wolves, not other illustrator's works. That's going to be the only way you can improve. It sounds blunt but I'm telling you what I've been told. Reference is the key here, and should you take my advice I look forward to seeing how you progress.
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Mood: Joy =13MARISA Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Really? :3 thank you! c:
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Mmhmm Youre pretty amazing
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=13MARISA Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
And you are a really great friend :> *hugs*
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i love it!!!!! amzing style!!!1 love it so much! thnxxx!!! she looks awesome!!!:D
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Mood: Joy =13MARISA Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I am very glad you like it!!! I hope I got the character's design correct!!! c:
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~Na17 Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay I don't have premium membership, so I'll try to do my best since the critique thing wouldn't let me complete my critique.

Okay from what I see, this is a very good piece you have here, but I want to help you improve on a few things while identifying the strong parts. The position of the wolf is very good, especially the paws. The angle of the head seems a little odd though. Try moving it more to the left. I think that it will give the whole picture an overall better look.

The way you blended the colors and shadows together is great. The other thing I think you need to work on is where the light source is coming from. In your picture it suggests that the light is coming from the left, but the shadows on the face do not suggest that. Your almost there though, so if you improve on just that part then you should be good.

Besides the color, your other strongest part is your lines. They are good and have the correct thickness. I also liked the detail you put into the claws. Try adding the same detail to the teeth.

Over all I think you did great and I would give it 7 out of 10.
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Mood: Joy =13MARISA Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sorry for the late answer!!! c'x

You actually can write a critique without being a premium member, it's just that you need to be a premium to _receive_ critiques. So I will suggest you in copying and pasting your text into the critique selection, thank you :D
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~Na17 Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I did that, but it wouldn't let be give you stars, and becuase it wouldn't I couldn't complete it.
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